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22考雅思啦,大作文第一次写,求打分,Somepeoplethinkthegovernmentshouldincreasethesportsfacilitiestosolvethepublichealthproblems.However,othersthinkthatothermeasuresshouldbetakentohelpresolvethisproblem.Discussbo
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22考雅思啦,大作文第一次写,求打分,

Somepeoplethinkthegovernmentshouldincreasethesportsfacilitiestosolvethepublichealthproblems.However,othersthinkthatothermeasuresshouldbetakentohelpresolvethisproblem.Discussbothviewsandgiveyourownopinion.

Incontemporaryworld,withthedevelopmentofthescienceandtechnology,aincreasinglylargenumberofpeoplepreferasedentorylifestylewhichwilldefinitelyengenderahigherincidenceofailments.Asasolutiontosuchaworringproblem,somepeoplebelievethatthegovernmentisoughttoincreasethesportsfacilitieswhilemanyothersheldtheopinionthatothermeasuresshouldbetaken.Inthisessay,Iwillexplorebothoftheopinions.

Inthefirstplace,thegovernmentsurelyhastheresponsibilitytoencouragetheconstructionofthesportsfacilitis.Andatmeantime,thegovernmentshouldensurethesefacilitisareeasilyaccessed.Thesefree-chargedfacilitiesandequipmentsarethedirectreasonsforthosepeoplewhohavegotcustomtoanon-exerciselifestyletosharesomesparetimetodoexercices.Inmyoberservation,forapersonwhodoesnotdoregularexercice,onceheorshenoticesthatsomewherehasalotofsportsfacilitiesconvenientforheorshetoaccess,thentheideaofdoingsportswill

naturallycomeuptohisorhermind.Thus,thispersonismorelikelytodoexercisethanthosewhohavenotchangcetonoticethefacilities.Whatismeantbythisisthatifnosportsfacilitieshavebeennoticed,thingswouldbetotallydifferent.Disputably,toincreasesportsfacilitiesisagoodwayofenhancingpublichealth.

However,sportsfacilityisjustasmallproportionofthisissue.Manymorethingscouldandhavetobedonetodevelopthelevelofpublichealth.Tostartwith,thegovernmentandsenitationauthoritiesshoulddisseminatepositiveinformationsabouttheessentialityofhealtythroughthemedia.Moreover,relevanteducationalinstitutioncouldbesetuptoraisethepublic'sawarenessofhealthandemphasisethefundamentalroleofhealththroughoutaperson'swholelife.However,themostimportantthingforthegovernmenttodoistosparenoefforttoprotecttheenvironment.Afterall,theenvironmentisalwaysthemostcrucialaspectintermsofpublichealth.

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  382字……你考试时确定40分钟能写得完么(小作文20分钟也可能会拖点时间),而且纸可能也不太够写   另外拼写也挺多错误的?是打错了还是拼错了?用word的自动更正自己看看,如worring、facilitis、changce、oberservation、healty等等   information不可数,不能加s   整体上感觉用了模板,十天的?不过这种套用可能也没问题吧,应该不是很严重   我也22号考,不是第一次,水平不高,只能给你这些小建议了
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